E-asttle writing.

Hello bloggers my name is Ashlee and I am a year six at Yaldhurst Model School. Today I will be showing you my          e-asttle writing. For the last two weeks we have been marking pieces of writing and then scoring them. And here is my one.  

The market 

On a warm summer's Saturday the market sprung so me and my family decided to see what they had. It didn't take me long to find what I wanted I want a crystal light colorful and gorgas.

Then out of nowhere I find a beautiful crystal but it is worth 500 dollars that's a little too hefty. The crystal feels smooth like an eal and shines like a diamond. Oh how beautiful it is I wish I could buy it but maybe not.

The black crystals are so amazing and shine like they were dipped in polish this is so amazing. The crystals like playing hide and seek when you are trying to find them. The food had the best delightful smell ever.

Then out of nowhere one of the stalls blow up so we have to get out of there so quickly it turns out there was a bomb dropped from a plane this scared me and my family so bad and now we have never gone to a market since this was a tragedy for me and yeah.

But now I live in a huge mansion and own gem shop and I love it I make millions every year and I now have 5 ponies for belgium. So yeah I am pretty happy and wealthy so yeah this was my tragedy and now I am like the money maker villain dipireful and exited my world has another type of hard money hard.

But I don’t live with millions of money now I give my crystales away for free.

We learned how the teachers mark our e-asttle writing work the hard part for me was structure and language but my favourite was sentence structure.